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The Sneaker Princess - Ch 9

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I still couldn't trim this down below 7K. OTL

Wanna know if any of the dialog really blows chunks here. The fact that I went over makes me worry about things being far too bloated.

:iconlanton: - Artist the preview clip's piece if from. I've done this 9 times...9 times! I still forget and have to edit this in during post. X-x
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This chapter felt especially well-written. ^_^ 

But again, 2 things:

"And at least I'll have the conscious, when that day arrives..." I'm not sure I understand the use of the word "conscious" here.

and

"a closer stroke towards 'lethal' then she could've ever imagined" Replace "then" with "than". :)