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Bravo, another great chapter! But 3 tiny things, if I may...
1. This sentence doesn't make sense to me: "I'm not a child anymore. Time I started acting like one." Is it supposed to say that?
2."a different 'warning color' was permanently died into the shoes" In this sentence, I believe the correct word is "dyed", not "died".
3. "We call them; the Exodai." I don't think a semi-colon can go there. I struggle with them as well, but from what I've read, they replace a period; you can use them to bind two parts of a sentence that could've worked as two separate ones. (See what I did there? )
Ahg I always feel like I'm being rude when correcting things in peoples' writing, but I hope this possibly helped! I can't wait to read the next chapters.