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So much emotion in this chapter!
Stuff: (Why are there nearly always exactly 3 things? O_o LOL)
1. "I just know it'd make the Creator unhappy if I painted the walkway if ya." If ya??? This doesn't make sense to me.
2. There are looots of semicolons in this chapter, but unfortunately most of them should be commas instead. (I know I mentioned this before, but just a reminder.)
3. "Instead something warm filled her lower body; something burning even a form without flesh to sear." I really don't understand the 2nd part of this sentence.
I can't believe the story is nearly over. I shall read the epilogue soon. I hope it has a happy ending. :3
Made just one change, from the first point. It was supposed to be 'painted the walkway with ya'.
Semicolons will have to be corrected later as that's a lot of sub-work I'm not quite wanting to tackle yet. X_X
As for #3, I may need to re-write that but maybe a quick explanation might work too. You have to remember that Alex's body isn't made out of flesh when in an Uncarnate state. If anything it's probably easier to think of it as 'ectoplasm', only with the consistency of Play'Doh and doesn't break no matter how much you stretch it. Thus, things like fire, ice, ect. that would normally damage human skin doesn't effect an Uncarnate body; because there are no nerves or skin cells to destroy. Making it odd that something could be burning her, even though her form/body has no flesh which can be seared.
As for the ending...I shall have to keep my mouth shut. XD Just be sure to read the description under the file when you're done with it.
Will do! ^_^