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The Sneaker Princess - Ch 1 by Aio-chan The Sneaker Princess - Ch 1 by Aio-chan

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Preview art is a snippet from a larger piece done by - lanton.deviantart.com (I really need to learn how to do Icon linking.)

...still not honestly sold on the title. It's the best I could come up with for now. XP

Editing was done a bit hastily on this one so apologies if more text errors than usual crop up. Was a bit more concerned with the character presentation, character logic, and the sheer amount of exposition in this. Feels like all three are potential weak points but, as usual, I could be over criticizing myself. Not sure really.

Think the problem is I've never been too confident with my set ups and Kari makes for potentially a rough character to read; simply because I'm trying to utilize a logic-focused character who 'isn't' a brain box (since most stories usually default to having those go hand in hand).

Eh, enough rambling. Throwing this into the pool and seeing what all of you think.

Enjoy~.

-Aio

Chapter Length: 6,017 Words
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Gluepaw Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
iiiiinteresting

will read more

(also, icon linking is : icon username :  )
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Aio-chan Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014
Thanks for that. XD I'll have to test it later.

At least the story seems to have some hook to it already then. When mulling over the pacing I'm not sure how quickly the 'main' concept can be inserted. So worries about it starting too slow are there. XP
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